|author||Hans-Nikolai Viessmann||2015-03-28 12:39:54 +0000|
|committer||Hans-Nikolai Viessmann||2015-03-28 12:39:54 +0000|
Fixed some tenses in the short story
1 files changed, 20 insertions, 19 deletions
diff --git a/_posts/2015-03-20-Random-short-story-1.markdown b/_posts/2015-03-20-Random-short-story-1.markdown
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@@ -6,25 +6,26 @@ description: A glowing light - shining through the darkness of the night
categories: blog random writing short-story
tags: wolves light orb
-I live in tree were the wolves can not catch me. One day however, looking out,
-high above the tree line, I saw a glinting light sparkle in the dark distance.
-Though I normally wait for the sun to rise before venturing beyond the safety
-of my tree, I wanted to know what shone so brightly. I hastened about for
-various tools to help find my way, and to protect me from the wolves. With my
-pack packed with all I might need, I jumped from a low branch to the ground
-overgrown with plants and insects. Running from tree to tree, the light of the
-moon casting shadows all around, the light floating down to a clearing far off.
-After seemingly an eternity of my heart pounding away, I reach the that
+I live in tree were the wolves can not catch me. Looking out high above the
+tree line, I see a glinting light sparkle in the dark distance. though I
+normally wait for the sun to rise before venturing beyond the safety
+of my tree, I want to know what shines so brightly. I hasten about for
+various tools to help me find my way and protect me from the wolves. With
+my pack packed with all I might need, I jump from a low branch to the ground
+overgrown with plants and insects. Running from tree to tree, the moonlight
+casting shadows all around, the bright light floats down to a clearing far
+off. After seemingly an eternity of my heart pounding away, I reach the
clearing where the light shines from. Looking through the bushes and low
hanging branches, I see the light floating there. I look around, not seeing
-anything or anyone, I move out toward the light, an orb that hangs on a thread
-strung to a high branch. It light ghostly white, swaying circularly in the
-ebbing breeze. I reach out, curiosity compelling me beyond my own reason. My
-fingers pass into the orb, I feel its light tingling and warming my fingers.
-But then pain radiates from my toes into my ankles and up my legs. I pull away
-from the orb, and as I do the light goes out. I tumble to the ground screaming.
-The pain has now reached my belly and tingles at my lungs. The pain overwhelms
-me, and I drift off into the ether.
+anything or anyone, I move out toward the light, an orb hanging on a thread
+strung to something high in the darkness of the night. Its light ghostly white,
+swaying and twisting in the waves of wind. I reach out, curiosity compelling
+me beyond my own reason. My fingers pass into the orb, I feel its light
+tingling and warming them. But then pain radiates from my toes into my
+ankles and up my legs. I pull away from the orb, and as I do the light goes
+out. I tumble to the ground screaming. The pain has now reached my belly and
+tingles at my lungs. The pain overwhelms me, and I drift off. The darkness
-I awake up and I see only blinding white light shining from all sides. I look
-down at myself, and see that it is I who shine.
+I awaken and I see only blinding white light shining from all sides. I look at
+myself and see the light shining from me.